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John's First Article as Minneapolis Gun Rights Examiner
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 Posted: Fri Feb 6th, 2009 06:43 pm
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http://www.examiner.com/x-3253-Minneapolis-Gun-Rights-Examiner
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 Posted: Fri Feb 6th, 2009 07:09 pm
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Good article, good points.  Short and effective.

Just a few things:

-  the first sentence says "Brandy"

-  "You see … the way it works is this." - I would have ended it with a ":" and made the "The" of the next sentence lowercase.

-  I would have made the final sentence a seperate paragraph for punch.

Get a new picture - you're better looking that it shows!
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 Posted: Fri Feb 6th, 2009 07:16 pm
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I fixed the mis-spelling.  It apparently takes a few minutes for newly updated content to refresh.

As for looking better than that picture, I will take that as a compliment and try to get a better picture taken but I am not sure that it will look any better.  :)



BB62 wrote: Good article, good points.  Short and effective.

Just a few things:

-  the first sentence says "Brandy"

-  "You see … the way it works is this." - I would have ended it with a ":" and made the "The" of the next sentence lowercase.

-  I would have made the final sentence a seperate paragraph for punch.

Get a new picture - you're better looking that it shows!
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 Posted: Sun Feb 8th, 2009 03:10 pm
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live in a dictatorship or under the rule of an authoritarian regime.
One or the other?

start by lifting up those in need and not by pushing down on law-abiding gun owners!
"lifting up those in need" is great.

Last edited on Sun Feb 8th, 2009 03:14 pm by Doug Huffman

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